Finished Flashback Stories

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Abdul’s flashback story

Grace’s flashback story

Mehrbaan’s flashback story

Malikah’s flashback story

 

Shabaz’s flashback story

Aedan’s flashback story p1-2

Aedan’s flashback story p3-4

Aedan’s flashback story p5

11 thoughts on “Finished Flashback Stories

  1. Wow Abdul I absolutely loved your story and good change from past to present. Just to improve it you might need a little bit more punctuation. Everyone else well done on these grest stories.

  2. Wow! I am very impressed Grace described everything really well so I can imagine what everything looked like.πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰

  3. Well done everyone these stories are fantastic but one thing you could have done was make your handwriting a bit more clear however they were excellent.

  4. Wow! Abdul I really liked your plane crash story. You have used a lot of speech and great emotive language. Maybe next time you could use more adjectives:)

  5. These are great flashback stories, you have all followed the structure of the model text and applied it to your own stories; you made big improvements during the editing stage.
    I think we could improve them even more by including a wider variety of Year 6 punctuation, particularly colons and semi-colons.

    • Wow all of them are really good but I think it needs a bit more descriptive language on how it happened like how we described it on the memories of war. Hope you’re feeing better Mr Jones!

  6. WOW well done everybody brilliant flashback stories, we love them. You could improve them by adding even more embedded clauses and semi colons! Keep up the great work! πŸ™‚

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